“It’s a hot one today. Isn’t it, Carl?”

“Yea, Gus. My brain’s so fried, I can’t think.”

“Come on over for a cold one, neighbor.”

“Why don’t you come over here for a dip in the pool.”

“So you think you’re better than me, Carl? You and your pool. Turning your nose up at my beer. I think I’ll just stick to my side of the fence drinking my nice cold beer. Thank you very much.”

“I didn’t mean any disrespect, Gus. I’m not a beer drinker.”

“You think you’re better than me?”

“No, Gus. I’m a recovering alcoholic.”


This flash fiction is in response to Charli Mill’s Carrot Ranch Flash Fiction Challenge.
July 1, 2015 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that includes the phrase, “Man, it’s a hot one.” You can choose a gender neutral replacement for the slang, “man” or any other general address. The phrase can lead, end or show up in the middle of the story. If the prompt leads you to a creative idea to alter the phrase, do it! And stay cool this week!



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9 responses to “Neighbors #flashfiction #99words”

  1. Gulara Avatar

    Great tension and fantastic dialogue! I could literally hear those guys.

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    1. Ula Avatar

      Thanks Gulara.

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  2. Charli Mills Avatar

    Great flash that develops in just 99 words!

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  3. mj6969 Avatar

    Fantastic twist at the end – makes for a wonderful read – as the heated tension builds – then the final, calming response – delivery like a refreshing rainstorm! Great job!

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    1. Ula Avatar

      Thank you.

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  4. Norah Avatar

    It just goes to prove that you can never be sure just why someone has made a particular decision. It may not be what you think. Great flash with lots to explore. 🙂

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    1. Ula Avatar

      Thank you Norah. You got to the moral of my story. Do you think that it was too heavy handed? I’m trying to figure out how to present “lessons” within my fiction.

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      1. Norah Avatar

        No, Ula. I think it worked really well. 🙂

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